Forum #3: A Few Possible Thesis Statements
Value Based Claims
Lunch shaming is unjust because it targets low-income children, instills life-long trauma and stigmatizes children for issues they have no control over.
Lunch shaming is unjust because it targets low-income children, instills life-long trauma and lands many economically unstable families into collections where their outstanding debt increases.
Lunch shaming is unjust because it utilizes humiliating and stigmatizing tactics to target children for issues they have no control over thereby instilling trauma without actually resolving the issues of debt and families inability to afford school lunch.
Policy Claim
School boards and government officials should find alternatives to lunch-shaming practices in order to collect lunch debt such as requiring eligibility forms for free lunch programs be completed prior to the first day of school, setting up systems to make paying for meals more convenient for parents, and improving debt notification systems.
Lunch shaming is unjust because it targets low-income children, instills life-long trauma and stigmatizes children for issues they have no control over.
Lunch shaming is unjust because it targets low-income children, instills life-long trauma and lands many economically unstable families into collections where their outstanding debt increases.
Lunch shaming is unjust because it utilizes humiliating and stigmatizing tactics to target children for issues they have no control over thereby instilling trauma without actually resolving the issues of debt and families inability to afford school lunch.
Policy Claim
School boards and government officials should find alternatives to lunch-shaming practices in order to collect lunch debt such as requiring eligibility forms for free lunch programs be completed prior to the first day of school, setting up systems to make paying for meals more convenient for parents, and improving debt notification systems.
Maggie, all your thesis statements are precise claims with reasons. Depending on which area of research for your reasons you one to work with you can just go for it. Good job! :)
ReplyDeleteThey are all good. The third one seems too wordy and without any breaks is hard to read. That one might be my first choice if you made it into a few sentences.
ReplyDeleteGreat job.
John
Maggie I really think you have some good points with that third one. Like John said just break it just a little. Maybe no unjust for that one, just suggestions.
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